some thoughts about Julia's outline

Do you have any ideas on how they could strengthen their thesis statement?
Although I don’t see a developed sentence in her thesis, I think her idea is very attractive. It might be good to relate the thesis more to the reader to grab more attention.
Any resources that you know might be relevant to them?
I think it might be a good idea to check if there is any video on you tube. Maybe YouTube might not qualify as a good recourse written in the research paper but I think it might give you some idea.
What is the quality of their sources? Any tips in general?
So, I picked Julia’s annotated bibliographies and outline as my review material. I first started reading her annotated bibliographies.
She picked the influence of Seattle chief as her topic and I was impressed by the topic. This topic is unique and very interesting and related to everybody in Seattle. For me I really want to know more as she opened this area. It is very clear that she knows all what her materials are talking about and I believe with that information she will be able to arrange and use the recourses to support her thesis in her research paper very well. All the recourses sticks with her thesis about alcoholism and one thing that I noticed that all the recourses were pretty recent (they are all published within recent 3years amazing!)
I am just a little confused by the first recourse. I don’t get the word “unauthenticity” and why it is so important if it is inauthentic?

Did you learn anything from this exercise? Why or why not?
Yes of course. First her topic inspired me to think out of the way I used to think. Like when I was picking the topic, all I thought about was education, food and things that were very general. I avoid using specific topic because I was worried there weren’t be a lot of recourse and thing that I can research on. But I found her topic about Seattle chief is specific and detailed!
I like to read quality writings as it improves my writing and always stimulates me that I have a lot more to work on.
Anything else you want to add?
Am I missing something? The thesis is about how the chief affects Seattle. But I don’t see enough supporting material for the thesis. The most of the outline is about the chief’s bio and I think it would be better to put more on how the chief affects Seattle.